The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017

The graph below shows the  number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017
The line graph compares how many tourists
visiting
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a particular Caribbean
island
from 2010 to 2017.
Overall
, the three different
visitors
staying
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on
island
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the island
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and on cruise ships in
time
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the time
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period.
While
the
visitors
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number of visitors
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staying on cruise ships and
island
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islands
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increased gradually, the total rose rapidly. As the graph shows,
visitors
staying on cruise ships in the beginning was around 0.25 in 2010.
Then
went up slightly to 0.5 in 2011, but declined moderately to approximately 0.27 in 2012.
Afterward
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,
visitors
staying started
climbed
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gradually to 2 between 2013 and 2017. The
visitors
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number of visitors
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staying on
island
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an island
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in the beginning was around 0.75 in 2010 and kept unchanged until 2011.
Then
growed
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it grew
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significantly to 1.5 from 2011 to 2013 and remained
constantly
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til 2015, but fell slightly to approximately 1.3 in 2016. After
jumped
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sharply to 1.5 in 2017. Regarding
total
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the total
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, in the
beginning
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was
with
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1 in 2010.
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Afterward
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total
visitors
increased gradually to around 2.7 between 2010 and 2016.
Then
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The
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total
visitors
rose quickly to 3.5 in 2017.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words island, visitors with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • trough
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • steady increase
  • sharp decline
  • seasonal variation
  • cruise ship visitors
  • island stay visitors
  • economic impact
  • environmental impact
  • tourism industry
  • sustainable tourism
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