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The bar chart shows the average number of hours students in five different universities studied.

The bar chart shows the average number of hours students in five different universities studied.
The bar chart illustrates the average number of
hours
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 students studied in five different universities , namely
University
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 A ,
University
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 B,
University
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 C ,
University
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 D, and
University
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 E. The most significant facts to emerge from the graph are that on weekdays , the most common academy is CC
10.6
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, 10.6
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hours
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,
while
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 the most common
universityis
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university is
 A9
hours
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 . The first chart shows weekdays in the
University
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 C students spend 10.6
hours
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 . The next most common
University
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 B is 10.1
hours
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. And
University
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 E 10
hours
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.
Subsequently
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 ,
University
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 A has 9.8
hours
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 , and the least common
University
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 is
University
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 D 9.6
hours
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. The second chart shows weekends , the dominant category of
university
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 is
University
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 A, 9hours, after
then
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University
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 B , 8.6
hours
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 .
University
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 C had slightly fewer
hours
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 , 7.8 . And the least
hours
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 of the Universities are
University
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 D and
University
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 E , with 5.6 and 6.2
hours
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.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 90%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, university with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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