The bar chart shows the average number of hours students in five different universities studied.

The bar chart shows the average number of hours students in five different universities studied.
The graph compares five different universities in terms of the average number of hours
students
study on weekdays and
weekends
.  
Overall
,
while
university
C
students
spent the most time studying during the week, on
weekends
,
university
A
students
spent the majority of their time studying.     As the graph shows, on weekdays, the
students
of
the
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university
C
we're
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were
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studying the most at 10.6,
whereas
the figure was the lowest in
the
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university
D at 9.6. The
students
of universities B and E
spend
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time at 10.1 and 10, respectively, but the
university
's A index was 9.8.  
By contrast
, on
weekends
,
the
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university
A has most of the
students
studying at 9:00,
while
the fewest hours are spent studying at
the
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university
D at 9.6. The figures for universities B and C were 8.6 and 7.8, respectively. The average number of hours that
university
E
students
spend on
weekends
was 6.2.
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