Having more money and less free time is better than earning less money and having more free time. Discuss both views and state your opinion.
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time
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time
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in the upcoming paragraph.
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people
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with family and friends, so it will be tough Use synonyms
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to build
relationship
with family members and it leads to problems in Fix the agreement mistake
relationships
family
. There are many advantages like saving Add an article
the family
money
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people
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, my uncle was a businessman he saved a lot of Linking Words
money
for foreign trips and had the same amount of Use synonyms
time
with his family as well.
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On the other hand
, the second set of Linking Words
people
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also
have to Linking Words
work
hard for their family life but they have so much Use synonyms
time
to spend with their family and colleagues. Most Use synonyms
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people
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work
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a limited
time
, so they have nothing to do apart from other Use synonyms
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enjoying
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For instance
, A middle-class man has a single job to do in a day after finishing his working hours they can spend their remaining Linking Words
time
with loved ones.
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they want to enjoy their life as they wish.Use synonyms
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Try to provide a clear thesis statement in your introduction to outline your opinion and the structure of your essay.
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Include a wider range of linking words and phrases to improve flow and cohesion between ideas and paragraphs.
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Be sure to directly address the question in your conclusion by clearly stating your opinion and summarizing the main points discussed.
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Use specific examples to support your points. While you provided examples, making them more detailed and relevant can strengthen your argument.
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You have discussed both views as the prompt requested, which shows good understanding of the task.
Coherence & Cohesion
Your essay has a logical structure with a clear distinction between paragraphs.
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You provided examples to support your points, which helps to illustrate your arguments.
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- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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