Scientific developments in farming always bring major benefits. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

In recent decades there
has
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been a number of high-profile innovations in farming based on scientific research, most notably the use of chemical insecticides and the genetic modification of crops. Without
doubt
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these have led to some very positive outcomes.
For example
, researchers have been able to identify which pests cause problems for a particular plant and to create a means of destroying them. In some areas of the
world
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this
has transformed farmers’ ability to grow food for their own consumption
as well as
to sell it to generate income. Equally, in recent years the ability to manipulate the genetic make-up of plants has made it possible to create strains of crops naturally resistant to pests and diseases. In fact, some of these new scientific developments are reducing the need for the innovations of the previous generation.
However
, there can be serious drawbacks to these scientific developments in agriculture.
For instance
, it is now becoming clear that pesticides may be damaging beneficial organisms
as well as
pests.
For example
, it is widely agreed that the world’s bee population is being affected by chemicals;
this
means fewer plants are being pollinated, which affects food supplies. It is possible,
also
, that a range of human diseases which are becoming increasingly common,
for example
asthma, may be exacerbated by these chemicals. My own view is that it would be wrong to deny the potential of science to improve agriculture – as it has done throughout history, from the development of the plough to the refinement of livestock breeding.
However
, we must be sure we understand as much as possible about the effects of innovations before it is too late to reverse any negative consequences.
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task achievement
Although the essay responds well to the topic and provides a balanced view, it could further benefit from a more elaborate stand on the extent to which the writer agrees or disagrees. Additional examples or discussion of recent innovations could aid in achieving this.
coherence cohesion
While the essay generally maintains a logical flow, enhancing the transitions between sections can boost coherence. This will help readers follow the progression of ideas more seamlessly.
coherence cohesion
The essay effectively introduces the topic and concludes with a clear personal stance, reflecting good organization.
task achievement
It provides relevant examples to back up the points discussed, enhancing the argument's credibility.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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