Nowadays many people want to buy famous brands of cloth, cars and other items. what are the reasons for this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

Present
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, people are likely to buy their everyday
stuffs
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stuff
kinds of stuff
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from famous
brands
. There can be a lot of reasons for purchasing including branding,
quanlity
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quantity
, fashion,
truthworthy
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trustworthy
, or
valueable
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valuable
. For clothes and accessories, it's not essential to buy from the big
brands
. There are
penty
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plenty
of
small
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a small
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store
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stores
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that
sale
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sell
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high
quanlity
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quality
stuffs
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stuff
kinds of stuff
pieces of stuff
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with
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at
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resonable
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reasonable
price
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prices
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.
However
, there are some
category
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categories
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that
is
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are
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more beneficial to buy from market
brand
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brands
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such
as electrical equipment and
car
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cars
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. The pros of buying from big
brands
including
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include
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truthworthy
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trustworthy
truth worthy
and after-sale
survice
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service
survive
.
Firstly
, buying from market
brands
is more truthful and likely to confirm the good
quanlity
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quality
of products.
For example
, there are two
company
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companies
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selling the same
labtop
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laptop
at the same price. The first
company
have run their business for a long time and
have
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has
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vary
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various
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models in the market. Meanwhile, the second
company
only have 2-3 models and
quite
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are quite
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new
for
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in
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this
area.
Thus
, the first
company
is more truthful and people are likely to buy from the first
company
.
Secondly
, another important factor is after-sales service and
repair
.
For example
,
the
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apply
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mass production
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mass-production
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car companies
such
as
toyota
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Toyota
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, honda, and
mazda
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Mazda
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have low
repair
cost
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costs
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and quick
repair
leading
time
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times
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.
This
is because
the
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they
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have
huge
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a huge
the huge
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number of selling and a lot of spare parts in stock.
Therefore
, when it comes to
repair
, they can find parts or equipment easily and fast.
To sum up
, buying from famous
brands
is both positive and negative
developement
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development
depending on
category
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the category
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of
stuffs
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stuff
kinds of stuff
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. For goods that need after-sales service, purchasing from big
brands
is more beneficial.
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