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Nowadays many people want to buy famous brands of cloth, cars and other items. what are the reasons for this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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Present
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, people are likely to buy their everyday
stuffs
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stuff
kinds of stuff
pieces of stuff
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 from famous
brands
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. There can be a lot of reasons for purchasing including branding,
quanlity
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quantity
, fashion,
truthworthy
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trustworthy
, or
valueable
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valuable
. For clothes and accessories, it's not essential to buy from the big
brands
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. There are
penty
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plenty
 of
small
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a small
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store
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stores
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 that
sale
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sell
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 high
quanlity
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quality
stuffs
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stuff
kinds of stuff
pieces of stuff
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with
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at
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resonable
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reasonable
price
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prices
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.
However
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, there are some
category
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categories
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that
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is
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are
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 more beneficial to buy from market
brand
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brands
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such
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 as electrical equipment and
car
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cars
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. The pros of buying from big
brands
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including
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include
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truthworthy
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trustworthy
truth worthy
 and after-sale
survice
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service
survive
.
Firstly
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, buying from market
brands
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 is more truthful and likely to confirm the good
quanlity
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quality
 of products.
For example
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, there are two
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company
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companies
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 selling the same
labtop
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laptop
 at the same price. The first
company
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 have run their business for a long time and
have
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has
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vary
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various
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 models in the market. Meanwhile, the second
company
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 only have 2-3 models and
quite
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are quite
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 new
for
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in
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this
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 area.
Thus
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, the first
company
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 is more truthful and people are likely to buy from the first
company
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.
Secondly
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, another important factor is after-sales service and
repair
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.
For example
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,
the
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apply
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mass production
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mass-production
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 car companies
such
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 as
toyota
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Toyota
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, honda, and
mazda
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Mazda
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 have low
repair
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cost
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costs
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 and quick
repair
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 leading
time
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times
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.
This
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 is because
the
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they
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 have
huge
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a huge
the huge
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 number of selling and a lot of spare parts in stock.
Therefore
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, when it comes to
repair
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, they can find parts or equipment easily and fast.
To sum up
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, buying from famous
brands
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 is both positive and negative
developement
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development
 depending on
category
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the category
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 of
stuffs
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stuff
kinds of stuff
pieces of stuff
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. For goods that need after-sales service, purchasing from big
brands
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 is more beneficial.

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vocabulary
Try to use a wider range of vocabulary and less repetitive language to make your essay more engaging.
grammar
Use a variety of sentence structures to showcase your language proficiency. Your essay leans towards simpler constructions.
task response
Ensure that you address all parts of the task. While you did discuss reasons for buying from famous brands and mentioned its positive sides, consider analyzing negative developments in more depth to fully cover the question.
coherence cohesion
Work on paragraphing and the use of cohesive devices to enhance readability and flow. Introducing clear paragraphs for each main idea, along with transition phrases, can improve coherence.
task response
You've presented a clear premise on why people might prefer purchasing from well-known brands, which aligns with a strong task response.
example use
Your examples are specific and relevant, effectively illustrating your points.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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