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The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors who came to UK for different purposes between 1989 and 2009.

The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors who came to UK for different purposes between 1989 and 2009.
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The diagram compares three
purposes
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 in terms of the visitors who came to the
UK
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 during the 20-year period between 1989 and 2009.
Overall
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, the three
purposes
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 experienced different trends.
While
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 visitors for holiday and business
purposes
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 went up with some fluctuations,
people
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 who came to visit friends or relatives experienced an upward trend. As the graph shows, visitors for holiday
purposes
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 started at 6.5
million
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 in 1989.
Then
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,
this
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 figure increased rapidly to 9
million
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 in 1999, followed by a small decrease to 7
million
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 in 2004. By 2009, 8.8
million
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people
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 had come to the
UK
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 for holidays. Regarding business aims, in 1989, 5.3
million
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people
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 came to the
UK
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. Afterwards,
this
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 index fell to 4
million
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 in 1993, followed by
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 rise to 7
million
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 in 1999.
Then
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, there was a fluctuation between 2000 and 2009.
By contrast
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,
people
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 who came to the
UK
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 to visit their friends or relatives were around 3.9
million
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 in 1989, followed by enormous growth to 7
million
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 in 2004.
Then
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, there was a steep decline to 6
million
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 in 2009.
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