The chart and table below give information about healthcare resources and life expectancy in different countries.

The chart and table below give information about healthcare resources and life expectancy in different countries.
The given bar chart and table depict the
number
of hospital bunks per thousand
people
and government expenditure on
health
.
Overall
, government
health
spending in
Japan
is the least among the two other countries but its life expectancy
as well as
the
number
of hospital bunks is the highest.
On the contrary
, the government
health
expenditure in the US is the highest but its
people
's lifespan can not surpass
Japan
's. In detail, the
health
spending in the US is $6,719 per person
while
most
people
there are likely to reach 78 years old in age, less than Netherlands and
Japan
. Even the
number
of hospital
beds
in the US is below those two countries. Apparently, the institution budget that has been issued is not efficient enough because of the lesser output. Meanwhile,
Netherlands
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seems to manage its
health
spending better. It has been proven from the longer
its
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people
's
life
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lives
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which is around 80 years and
also
the more hospital
beds
. Above them all,
Japan
is the most efficient one. The expenditure of healthcare is just $2,581 per person but its
people
's lifespan exceeds 80 years old.
In addition
, the
number
of hospital bunks in there is the highest too. It is
also
displayed in the graph that a country like Germany has a quite high
number
of hospital
beds
, approximately 8
beds
per one thousand
people
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, people, health, japan, beds with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • healthcare resources
  • life expectancy
  • per capita
  • modern medical equipment
  • correlate
  • accessibility
  • average lifespan
  • healthcare policies
  • government healthcare spending
  • disparities
  • developed countries
  • developing countries
  • global health inequalities
  • technological advancements
  • telemedicine
  • AI diagnostics
  • health outcomes
  • public health initiatives
  • vaccination programs
  • preventive healthcare
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