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You recently stayed at a hotel for a conference with your company and there were several problems with your room. Write to the hotel management to complain. In the letter, you should: • Where you stayed • What the problems were • How they can fix your complaints

#hotel #conference #company #room #management #complaints
Dear Sir / Madam I am writing
this
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complaint
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your
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about your
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 hotel when I was in your hotel on 20th February at weekends.
Although
,
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 the hotel was the most popular in the centre of
city
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the city
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 and opposite shopping malls, I faced
on
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some problems there. My room was on the fifth floor, it is in the middle of
building
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the building
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. I used
lift
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a lift
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 to go out .
While
 I was going out to buy new
jewellary
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jewellery
 for my daughter from
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a jewellary
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jewellary
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jewellery
 store shop the lift stopped. I had to stay there
one
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for one
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 hour.
Also
, I
didnot
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did not
didn't
 like your
shef's
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chef's
 meals. It was so sour . In my
opinion
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 your company always should check up lifts before coming
guest
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guests
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. It would be better
exchange
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to exchange
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 another
shef
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shelf
chef
 beside
to
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this
 one . I look forward to
improwing
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improving
 hospitality in
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future
furure
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future
 Yours truly Muyassar Nazarova
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Structure
Try to ensure your letter has a clear structure with an introduction, body, and conclusion. This makes your main points clearer and your arguments more persuasive.
Paragraph Use
Remember to use paragraphs to separate different ideas. This helps to keep your writing organized and makes it easier for the reader to follow your points.
Tone
It's important to use a tone that is appropriate for a formal letter of complaint. This means being polite and respectful, even when expressing dissatisfaction.
Content
Be specific about your complaints and, if possible, suggest reasonable solutions or what you expect the management to do. This can make your letter more effective.
Task Response
You did a good job of identifying the main problems you encountered during your stay. This is crucial for the task requirement.
Formality
Your use of a formal greeting and closing is appropriate for the situation.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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