The line graph gives information about the number of Iranian, Greek and Turkish students who enrolled at Sheffield University between 2005 and 2009.
the lines in the graph show
informations
about how Change the wording
information
pieces of information
much
Correct quantifier usage
many
Iranian
, Greek
and Turkish
students
who at Sheffield University from 2005 and 2009.
Iranian
and Turkish
, Students
in 2005 were so close in numbers, But Greek
students
where
Correct your spelling
were much
mutch
higher Correct your spelling
much
then
both Correct your spelling
than
of
Change preposition
apply
Iranian
and Turkish
students
, as the
yours go we can see that Remove the article
apply
Iranian
and Turkish
,
numbers start going up, From 2005 untall
2006 start going up, Correct your spelling
until
Iranian
students
were 40 international students
now in 2006 thay
are above 60 Correct your spelling
they
students
, also
Turkish
students
were 20 in 2005, now they are 40, And Greek
number
of students
start going dawn in 2005 they were 180, after 2006 the number
is decreasing alot
, in 2007 the Correct your spelling
a lot
number
of students
was steady, but in 2008 it's start
going dawn Change the verb form
it starts
agein
.
The Correct your spelling
again
agein'
number
of student
Change to a plural noun
students
start
increasing for both Wrong verb form
started
Iranian
and Turkish
students
, In 2007 the number
of students
was above 60 for Iranuan, Correct word choice
and Trukish
Trukish
Correct your spelling
Turkish
students
were above 80. and it's
Unnecessary verb
it
start
to go up way more in 2008, Wrong verb form
started
Iranian
was almost 90, and Turkish
students
were above the
100, and in 2009 both were way higher Correct article usage
apply
then
Replace the word
than
Greek
, Iranian
160, and Turkish
students
140.Submitted by maher123123ed on
Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.
Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
▼
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words iranian, greek, turkish, students, number with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
▼
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
▼
Ultimate Speaking practice for IELTS
Practice speaking step by step, answer real-life questions, and build your confidence. Start your free trial and improve your speaking skills today!