The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar charts illustrate a comparison of families' wages in a week between 1968 and 2018.
Overall
, it can be seen that in the
last
50 years ago people spent most of their money on themselves
goods
instead
of other needs
while
in the modern day,
this
amount
of money was assigned to impersonal stuff. First of all, in 1968 a huge
amount
of money was spent on food 35% of weekly income,
in contrast
, the weekly spent experienced a 13% decline in 2018.
Although
housing and clothes had equal shares with only one in ten per cent in 1968, the housing expenditure doubled in the
amount
in 2018
while
clothing halved in that year. Second of all,
while
the household
goods
had the same shares in weekly income with about 8% each both in 2018 and 1968, the fuel and power section saw a minor drop from 6% to about 4% from 1968 to 2018 which was the lowest
amount
in 2018. The three other parts, the personal
goods
, transportation, and leisure, had the same
amount
of shares with about 10% each unless the personal
goods
declined in 2018, the two other sections were rosed dramatically with the leisure part
was tripled
Wrong verb form
tripling
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in total.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words goods, amount with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • compare
  • spending patterns
  • allocated
  • weekly income
  • significant changes
  • essential items
  • food
  • housing
  • clothing
  • leisure
  • communication
  • increase
  • decrease
  • twofold rise
  • substantial increase
  • quadrupling
  • declined
  • food and drink
  • slight increase
  • prioritizing
  • necessities
  • transitioned
  • portio
  • non-essential items
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