The line graph gives information about the number of Iranian, Greek and Turkish students who enrolled at Sheffield University between 2005 and 2009.

The line graph gives information about the number of Iranian, Greek and Turkish students who enrolled at Sheffield University between 2005 and 2009.
The line graph illustrates
number
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a number
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of
student
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students
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of
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from
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three countries belonging
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Sheffield University between 2005 and 2009.
Increasing
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number
of students are Turkish and Iranian ;throughout
four-years
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in
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Sheffield University ,
whaile
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which
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to a
thrid
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third
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count of
Greece
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Greek
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student
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students
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. Shown line graph is Irainan individuals in 2005 about 20
student
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students
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comparison
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of
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2009 ;
therefore
their
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reached 120.
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raise
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with Progress in years. Turkish
student
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students
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in 2005 ,was
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about 40 double of Iranian. In 2005 Greece
student
about 180 almost
Three-Double
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another
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countries, but in 2009
to retreat
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40 same
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as Turkish
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in 2004.
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