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The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors who came to the UK for different purposes between 1989 and 2009.

The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors who came to the UK for different purposes between 1989 and 2009.
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The chart reveals the amount of newcomers who attended to the UK, or with numerous destinations, between 1989 and 2009.
Overall
,tourists who arrived for leisure purposes were at the highest level,
while
 those visiting friends and relatives were at a lower level. As
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 illustrates, no more than 6
million
 people approached in 1989 to spend their holiday,
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 it
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significantly reached a peak with 19
million
 tourists in 1998. After
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 went down sharply
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 7
million
 quantity in 2004. Regarding the company, it stayed with 11
million
 newcomers in 1994, after rising significantly
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 7
million
 in 1999.
Following
this
 point, it increased steadily to around 8
million
 in 2004.
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 with a destination of seeing close people slightly went up roughly in 1994 and 1999 with 4, as well
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million
 respectively.
Then
 reached a peak with 7
million
 citizens from abroad in 2004,
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 gradually dropped
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 6
million
 in 2009.
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