Some people think that keeping pets is good for children while others think it is dangerous and unhealthy. Which opinion do you agree with?
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pets
on children
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apply
pets
have more benefits than harm. For instance
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pets
tend to have stronger immune system
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systems
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and are
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important life skills such
as responsibility and empathy.
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pets
, especially larger or more aggressive dogs although
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can harm to
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apply
children
biting
. Concern about keeping Verb problem
apply
pets
for children
that allergies and healthy
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health
pets
can trigger allergies in some children
leading to respiratory issues or skin problems. Additionally
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Additionally,
pets
carry the risk of transmitting diseases or parasites to children
.
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whether
pets
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beneficial
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detrimental
children
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