Crime rates are likely to decline due to the advancements in technology, which will help prevent and solve crimes in an easier way.
The technological
advancements are likely to stop criminal activities, which helps in preventing and solving crime cases without facing difficulty. Correct article usage
Technological
This
essay totally agrees with the statement because it helps finding
offenders and monitor the public places online.
Reaching the crime location Wrong verb form
find
made
easy with the technology. Add a missing verb
is made
Evolution
of tech applications and software help us to reach and find both Correct article usage
The evolution
law breakers
and victims effortlessly. Correct your spelling
lawbreakers
For instance
, it is mandatory to
everyone in both Telangana and Andhra Pradesh to install and register Change preposition
for
to
DISHA APP, Change preposition
for
therefore
it acts as the communicator between the Victims and police, this
application shares the live location to the near by
police station Correct your spelling
nearby
as well as
guardian
of the victim. Add an article
the guardian
a guardian
This
will assist us to save the targets without being attackted
or harmed.
Correct your spelling
attacked
on the other hand
, monitoring public and private places online reduces the effects of crimes. It is very common for many compaies
and organisations to install surveillance cameras Correct your spelling
companies
to
Change preposition
in
thier
buildings and office places to observe the Correct your spelling
their
situatons
Correct your spelling
situations
situation
in
work and private Change preposition
at
place
. one of the most effective Fix the agreement mistake
places
feature
of these cameras is, Change to a plural noun
features
Correct word choice
that it
it
will Correct pronoun usage
they
alerts
the owner if something Change the verb form
alert
went
wrong or going to be wrong. Wrong verb form
goes
For example
, in andhra
pradesh, Change the capitalization
Andhra
State
Bank Of India Correct article usage
the State
is
underwent Unnecessary verb
apply
robbery
on 12th Correct article usage
a robbery
august
2022, Capitalize word
August
however
the robbers Add a comma
however,
are
caught on the very next day. Wrong verb form
were
This
became possible with the help of CCTV footage, which reveals the faces of thieves
and the direction they went after the robbery.
In conclusion, Surveillance Cameras and SOS Correct article usage
the thieves
applicatons
Correct your spelling
applications
application
plays
crucial roles in finding the cause of Correct subject-verb agreement
play
the
crime, I believe that upgraded technology helps to reduce and Correct article usage
apply
reslove
Correct your spelling
resolve
the
criminal issues.Correct article usage
apply
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