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The pie charts below provide information about the changes in annual spending by local authorities in Someland in 1980, 1990 and 2000.

The pie charts below provide information about the changes in annual spending by local authorities in Someland in 1980, 1990 and 2000.
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The charts compare yearly spending in three disparate years in
Someland
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Homeland
.
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,
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 in all three periods, most of the budget was devoted to
the
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higher
education
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. Meantime, the percentage of the funding dedicated to
the
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environmen
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environmental
 services did not change a lot. The higher and K-12
education
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 account for most of the spending budgets. In 1980, about 35 per
cent
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 of the annual spending was devoted to
the
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higher
education
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 and
this
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 number
raised
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 by 5 per
cent
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 every decade after that. Meanwhile, from 25 per
cent
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 in 1980, the K-12
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education
ecudation
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education
 costs
reduced
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 to 20 per
cent
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 in 1990 in 18 per
cent
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 in 2000. The transportation
section
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sector
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 did not have
a
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regular spending during those years. Its part
initially
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 fell by 10 per
cent
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 from 16 and
then
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 raised to 22 per
cent
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 in 2000. Just like that, the health and human resources part
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 from 14 per
cent
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 in 1980 to 20 per
cent
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 in 1990 as much as the K-12
education
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 and
then
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 reached
its
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half in 2000. Simultaneously, the environmental resources experienced a rise in its budget throughout those years.

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