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The diagram below shows the process for recycling products

The diagram below shows the process for recycling products
#process #products
The
depict
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 below illustrates the way
of
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how
pruducts
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products
 are recycled.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 there are 2 ways of using plastic items like bottles. The first one is throwing the used ones
to
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 trash
can
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cans
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 where
it
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 can not be sorted and it would take
a
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lot of space
on
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 the landfill. The second way is collecting the cans which were pre-used for recycling. The second process commences with collecting and sorting
the
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 variety of
packeges
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packages
by
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this it
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 can
be send
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 to
sorting
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 house where
it
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they
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 can be processed and
recyled
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recycled
 to give one more life to
product
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the product
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 for consumption in stores.
Meanwhile
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on
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 the first
stage
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 people just making lands filled with rubbish.
In addition
, it is better to
pre-use
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re-use
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 the plastic rather than spoiling the environment.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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