Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss ofparticular species ofplants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.
Nowadays, there is a debate that the most crucial environmental
problem
is extinction
of Add an article
the extinction
the
some animal and plant species. Remove the article
apply
However
others believe that climate Add a comma
However,
change
and air
pollution are more essential than others. This
essay dives into both oppion
and analysis Correct your spelling
opinion
the
problems.
Change preposition
of the
To begin
with, extinction of the plants
and the
Correct article usage
apply
animals
affects each other. For example
, the
recent Correct article usage
apply
stduies
show that Correct your spelling
studies
reef
population Correct article usage
the reef
is
rapidly declined in Verb problem
has
recent
ten years because individuals throw their Correct word choice
the last
trashes
Correct subject-verb agreement
trash
to
the sea and the ocean and factories pour their toxic waste Change preposition
into
to
the Change preposition
into
seas
. When the reefs Fix the agreement mistake
sea
destroyed
, fishes which live in the reef are Add a missing verb
are destroyed
gonna
extinct. Verb problem
going
Moreover
, illegal hunting extincted
some animal species Correct your spelling
extinct
Change preposition
in preivous
preivous
years and these living Correct your spelling
previous
beigns
make balance in the ecosystem Correct your spelling
beings
like
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apply
plants
take nutritions
from Fix the agreement mistake
nutrition
animals
' dirt and animals
take nitruious from plants
. Therefore
, this
essay agrees that eliminating various speicies
of Correct your spelling
species
animals
and plants
is the main problem
.
On the other hand
, decreasing the air
quality and increasing the temperature treat the living beigns
on Earth. Correct your spelling
beings
begins
The
recent study displays that using fossil flues decreases Correct article usage
A
air
quality in some cities such
Quanzu
and New Delhi and it increases the Change preposition
as Quanzu
temperatue
all around the Correct your spelling
temperature
world
, as a
result
climates slowly Add the comma(s)
result,
change
in many areas. For
instance
living beings use Add a comma
instance,
the
oxygen Correct article usage
apply
for
continue to live but if Change preposition
to
air
pollutaion spreads to the whole world
, some speices
will extinct in the near future and Correct your spelling
species
becuase
of fossil flues, increasing temperatures melt Correct your spelling
because
poles
and it rises Correct article usage
the poles
water
level of the Correct article usage
the water
world
. Thus
, climate change
and air
pollution are also
the most important issues.
In conclusion, every environmental problem
are
Change the verb form
is
crurcial
for living Correct your spelling
crucial
beigns
and they affect each other. Correct your spelling
beings
It is clear that
climate change
and air
pollution are more major problem
than others because they affect Fix the agreement mistake
problems
whole
Change the article
the whole
world
at the same time and it
Correct pronoun usage
apply
leads
to Correct subject-verb agreement
lead
extinct
different animal species around the Earth.Correct word choice
the extinction of
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Coherence & Cohesion
Aim to clarify and develop your main points more distinctly for each viewpoint. This will help in enhancing the coherence of your argument and making your stance clearer.
Language Accuracy
Be cautious with spelling and grammar to ensure your argument is easily understood. For example, correct phrases like 'reef population is rapidly declined' to 'reef populations have rapidly declined'.
Task Achievement
Work on the structure of your essay to include clear introductory and concluding paragraphs, stating your opinion explicitly in the conclusion for a stronger task achievement.
Task Achievement
Offer more specific examples and data to strengthen your argument and provide a more convincing case on your view of the most pressing environmental problem.
Task Achievement
You effectively addressed both views of the environmental issue, offering a balanced discussion.
Use of Examples
Good attempt to use specific examples, such as the reference to reef population decline and pollution in Quanzu and New Delhi, to support your arguments.
Your opinion
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If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.
Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.
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