Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss ofparticular species ofplants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

Nowadays, there is a debate that the most crucial environmental
problem
is
extinction
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the extinction
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of
the
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some animal and plant species.
However
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others believe that climate
change
and
air
pollution are more essential than others.
This
essay dives into both
oppion
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opinion
and analysis
the
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problems.
To begin
with, extinction of the
plants
and
the
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animals
affects each other.
For example
,
the
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recent
stduies
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studies
show that
reef
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the reef
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population
is
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has
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rapidly declined in
recent
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the last
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ten years because individuals throw their
trashes
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trash
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to
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into
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the sea and the ocean and factories pour their toxic waste
to
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into
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the
seas
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sea
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. When the reefs
destroyed
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are destroyed
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, fishes which live in the reef are
gonna
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going
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extinct.
Moreover
, illegal hunting
extincted
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extinct
some animal species
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in preivous
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preivous
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previous
years and these living
beigns
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beings
make balance in the ecosystem
like
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apply
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plants
take
nutritions
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nutrition
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from
animals
' dirt and
animals
take nitruious from
plants
.
Therefore
,
this
essay agrees that eliminating various
speicies
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species
of
animals
and
plants
is the main
problem
.
On the other hand
, decreasing the
air
quality and increasing the temperature treat the living
beigns
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beings
begins
on Earth.
The
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recent study displays that using fossil flues decreases
air
quality in some cities
such
Quanzu
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as Quanzu
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and New Delhi and it increases the
temperatue
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temperature
all around the
world
,
as a
result
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result,
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climates slowly
change
in many areas.
For
instance
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living beings use
the
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oxygen
for
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to
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continue to live but if
air
pollutaion spreads to the whole
world
, some
speices
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species
will extinct in the near future and
becuase
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because
of fossil flues, increasing temperatures melt
poles
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the poles
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and it rises
water
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the water
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level of the
world
.
Thus
, climate
change
and
air
pollution are
also
the most important issues. In conclusion, every environmental
problem
are
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is
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crurcial
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crucial
for living
beigns
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beings
and they affect each other.
It is clear that
climate
change
and
air
pollution are more major
problem
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problems
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than others because they affect
whole
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the whole
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world
at the same time and
it
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apply
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leads
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lead
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to
extinct
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the extinction of
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different animal species around the Earth.
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Coherence & Cohesion
Aim to clarify and develop your main points more distinctly for each viewpoint. This will help in enhancing the coherence of your argument and making your stance clearer.
Language Accuracy
Be cautious with spelling and grammar to ensure your argument is easily understood. For example, correct phrases like 'reef population is rapidly declined' to 'reef populations have rapidly declined'.
Task Achievement
Work on the structure of your essay to include clear introductory and concluding paragraphs, stating your opinion explicitly in the conclusion for a stronger task achievement.
Task Achievement
Offer more specific examples and data to strengthen your argument and provide a more convincing case on your view of the most pressing environmental problem.
Task Achievement
You effectively addressed both views of the environmental issue, offering a balanced discussion.
Use of Examples
Good attempt to use specific examples, such as the reference to reef population decline and pollution in Quanzu and New Delhi, to support your arguments.

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