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The tables give information about the temperatures and hours of daylight in London and Sydney during the same weekend in December 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The tables give information about the temperatures and hours of daylight in London and Sydney during the same weekend in December 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table illustrates the different
temperatures
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 and daylight hours in two different cities,
London
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 and
Sydney
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 on
a
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the
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 same weekend in December 2018.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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Sydney
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 has the highest
temperatures
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 as compared to
London
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. The days in
London
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 are much shorter as compared to Syndey, which has early
sunrise
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 and late sunsets. A
day
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 in
London
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 begins
few
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a few
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 minutes past 08:00 with the maximum temperature ranging between 9-10
degree
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degrees
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 Celcius, which is several times lower as compared to
Sydney
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 where the highest
temperatures
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 hover between 26-31
degrees
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. The
day
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 in
Sydney
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 lasts longer till around 20:06, which is much later as compared to the sunset timing in
London
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, which is around 16:00. The hottest
day
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 in
Sydney
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 was recorded on Sunday 30th with
temperatures
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 ranging until 31
degrees
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,
while
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 the hottest
day
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 in
London
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 had a temperature of only 13
degrees
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 on Saturday. The minimum temperature of both the locations varied alot from 3
degrees
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 in
London
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 to 17
degrees
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 in
Sydney
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.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words temperatures, london, sydney, day, degrees with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • temperatures
  • hours of daylight
  • comparison
  • London
  • Sydney
  • December 2018
  • weekend
  • information
  • data
  • summarise
  • select
  • report
  • features
  • analysis
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