IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 7

The tables give information about the temperatures and hours of daylight in London and Sydney during the same weekend in December 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The tables give information about the temperatures and hours of daylight in London and Sydney during the same weekend in December 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
#tables #information #temperatures #hours #daylight #london #sydney #weekend #december #summarise #features #comparisons
The table illustrates the different
temperatures
 and daylight hours in two different cities,
London
 and
Sydney
 on
a
Correct article usage
the
show examples
 same weekend in December 2018.
Overall
,
it is clear that
Sydney
 has the highest
temperatures
 as compared to
London
. The days in
London
 are much shorter as compared to Syndey, which has early
sunrise
Fix the agreement mistake
sunrises
show examples
 and late sunsets. A
day
 in
London
 begins
few
Correct article usage
a few
show examples
 minutes past 08:00 with the maximum temperature ranging between 9-10
degree
Fix the agreement mistake
degrees
show examples
 Celcius, which is several times lower as compared to
Sydney
 where the highest
temperatures
 hover between 26-31
degrees
. The
day
 in
Sydney
 lasts longer till around 20:06, which is much later as compared to the sunset timing in
London
, which is around 16:00. The hottest
day
 in
Sydney
 was recorded on Sunday 30th with
temperatures
 ranging until 31
degrees
,
while
 the hottest
day
 in
London
 had a temperature of only 13
degrees
 on Saturday. The minimum temperature of both the locations varied alot from 3
degrees
 in
London
 to 17
degrees
 in
Sydney
.
Submitted by mshkrp2 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words temperatures, london, sydney, day, degrees with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 4 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
▼
Topic Vocabulary:
  • temperatures
  • hours of daylight
  • comparison
  • London
  • Sydney
  • December 2018
  • weekend
  • information
  • data
  • summarise
  • select
  • report
  • features
  • analysis
What to do next:
Look at other essays: