The line graph shows thefts per thousand vehicles in four countries between 1990 and 1999.

The line graph shows thefts per thousand vehicles in four countries between 1990 and 1999.
The line graph
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the
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information about the stolen car in four different countries from 1990 to 1999
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, the
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of Sweden increased significantly ,
whereas
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observed approximately
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unchanging Moving to a detailed analysis , in
Sweden
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the indicator of stolen cars stood at about 6 in 1990 , it rose
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to 13
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following six years and remained stable
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between 1996 and1998 .
at the end
of the
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it increased significantly With regard to other countries , the figures for Canada and France stood at between 5 and 10 ,
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the
rate
of
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Britain was approximately 18 in 1990 . A gradual decrease was observed in the
rate
of Canada and France in
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three years .
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during
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there is a
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decrease in Great Britain . The
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that of France and
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Britain followed
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direction as a fluctuated decrease until the end of the period
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
Vocabulary: Replace the words rate with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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