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The line graph shows thefts per thousand vehicles in four countries between 1990 and 1999.

The line graph shows thefts per thousand vehicles in four countries between 1990 and 1999.
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The line graph
provide
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the
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information about the stolen car in four different countries from 1990 to 1999
Overall
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, the
rate
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 of Sweden increased significantly ,
whereas
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 that of other countries
are
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 observed approximately
fluctuated
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unchanging Moving to a detailed analysis , in
Sweden
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 the indicator of stolen cars stood at about 6 in 1990 , it rose
considerable
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 to 13
the
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 following six years and remained stable
along
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between 1996 and1998 .
at the end
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 of the
period
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 it increased significantly With regard to other countries , the figures for Canada and France stood at between 5 and 10 ,
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however
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 the
rate
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of
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 Britain was approximately 18 in 1990 . A gradual decrease was observed in the
rate
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 of Canada and France in
first
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 three years .
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 during
this
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period
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 there is a
fluctuated
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 decrease in Great Britain . The
rate
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 of Canada increased slightly ,
whereas
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that of France and
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Great
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 Britain followed
same
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 direction as a fluctuated decrease until the end of the period

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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