The chart shows the percentage of women and men in one Asian country who passed when they took their driving test between 1980 and 2010.

The chart shows the percentage of women and men in one Asian country who passed when they took their driving test between 1980 and 2010.
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The chart shows positive driving test results for both genders in an Asian country from 1980 and 2010.
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, based on data provided in the chart, women contestants surpass the percentage of men in competition with remarkably high results. Starting from the 1980s's women competitors rank almost 20% more and lead the statistics. Regarding information, in the year 1990 female applicants just managed to increase the level by over 50%.
Initially
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, the number of passes became that in 2000 statistics reached their highest at around 70% . From today's perspective, an unexpected decrease of 5% is partly a way for male contestants to win.
On the other hand
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, beginning of the '80s 29% of successful attempts were shown between male participants. Jumping to 1990 similarity appeared as results were the same with females. The highest number happened to be reached in 2000 and 2010 by nearly 10% for both years and
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