Multinational companies are becoming increasingly common in developing countries. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?
Recent human advancements
resulted
many changes in business and commerce worldwide. Nowadays, multinationals have been increasing Add the preposition
resulted in
resulted from
its
presence globally including countries in development as potential markets. Correct pronoun usage
their
This
progress has advantages for the progress of communities as benefit
countries' Correct subject-verb agreement
benefits
economy
and Fix the agreement mistake
economies
create
new jobs, but there are Change the verb form
creates
also
some disavantages
because it can not only negatively impact small Correct your spelling
disadvantages
business
but Fix the agreement mistake
businesses
also
creates economical
dependence on big Replace the word
economic
companies
.
Multinational companies
expansion is Change noun form
company's
companies'
undoubtely
beneficial to countries' development. Nowadays, with the advance of globalization, products and services from global brands like Prada, Adidas, Apple and McDonalds are more available for those who want to consume them. Another Correct your spelling
undoubtedly
posite
aspect is that having big Correct your spelling
positive
companies
present in different communities creates new job opportunities. Furthermore
, this
positive
for the country’s Add a missing verb
is positive
economy
growth. In Brazil, Replace the word
economic
for instance
, Ford announced that they were establishing three new factories in different states during the 2000's
. The establishment of the global brand not only generated thousands of jobsFix apostrophe usage
2000s
,
but Remove the comma
apply
also
contributed to a sunbstantial
increase in car sales that contributed to Correct your spelling
substantial
a
significant Remove the article
apply
economy
growth.
Replace the word
economic
Nevertheless
, global companies
' presence is not totally positive. Big brands, for example
, usually invest a large amount of money in marketing with the intention to dominate the market. As a result
, people prioritize their stores when shopping goods
, which negatively impacts local establishments. With sales Change preposition
for goods
decline
and Wrong verb form
declining
less
resources to compete with big Change the quantifier
fewer
companies
, many local businesses end up closing down. Besides
that, there are realistic risks if multinationals decide to cease operations in the country. One of the risks is that an act like this
would affect the community drastically with the sudden job loss, thus
families would be in
financial pressure. Change preposition
under
As a result
, the country’s financial system would be negatively impacted.
In conclusion, although
multinational enterprises contribute to the economy
growth and create job opportunities Replace the word
economic
it
can Correct pronoun usage
they
also
negatively affect local corporations and create a dependence that can impact communities if they close operations.Submitted by betinhaa00 on
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