Some people think it's better to choose friends who always have the same opinons as thet. Other people believe it's good to have frineds who sometimes disagree with them. Discuss both these views and give your own opinon.

There is an ongoing debate in
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society these days where some opine that it's
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beneficial
to have friends who share
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intrests
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interests
and hobbies. whilst others disagree and
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different
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mindset and
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separate
seprate
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opinion is necessary
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friendship. I believe completely agree with the latter statement, different opinions and disagreements help an individual to understand things from
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prespective
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perspective
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To begin
with, It is often believed that sharing
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interests and opinions with an individual goes a long way. It might be because when two individuals have matching
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it is easier for them to get along and do things together.
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interest in music, would get along and share their thoughts easily. On
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hand, some people support the opinion that
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fine to have disagreements between friends. disagreements could be because their
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thoughts
are not aligned. Both the parties believe in different things. But that
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, as it helps an individual to rethink
about
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the disagreement from
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different
prespective
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phrase "opposite attracts" stands true
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date for various reasons. In conclusion, friends are going to have agreements and
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disagreements
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