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of
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population who live in
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benefits
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of
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trend . To
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begin
with
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of the most essential
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for the industries
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is
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words
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,
ingeneers
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engineers
frustrate with not only limited space to create but
also
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equipment
for those who live
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corners
.
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there are more than ten building companies who used to
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concentrate
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niether
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neither
regions nor
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.
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, CHILDRENS IN
CITY
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not able to be
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OR HAVE CURIOSITY
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the
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started to work out on conditionals for
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with
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degree of
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private companies
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low-developed
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influence
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city
corners
development , they will be able to have
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themselves
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centers
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for
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challenges
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brand
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they will have both
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figures
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of
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Zealand
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more individuals from
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countrysides
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visit
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department
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and malls
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with
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monopolised
cities . In
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words
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a corporation has made both
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of people from those poor statistics
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also
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their own work .
therefore
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village
households are improved
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it will have
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advantages
for both sides . in conclusion ,
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consider that
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aims
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as
urbanization
, charity and
income
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contribute
planers to
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arrange
facilities not only for
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centres
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bur
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but
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also
villages
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for villages
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in order to take an
income
and
reralize
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realize
better
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equipment
types of equipment
pieces of equipment
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for
vilages
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villages
.
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