Some people think foreign tourists should be charged more than locals when they visit tourist attractions. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In the modern world , overseas travelling is most common .
Individual
visiting different countries for their holidays . Some people Fix the agreement mistake
Individuals
believes
that overseas visitors should charged extra Change the verb form
believe
compare
to Wrong verb form
compared
home
country fellow . I strongly disagree with Correct pronoun usage
their home
this
assertion and this
essay will acknowledge the validity of this
statement and elaborate my reason.
Tourism is one of the crucial source
of Fix the agreement mistake
sources
income
in any country . Few countries
economy totally relies on foreign visitors .For Change noun form
country's
countries'
instances
,Fix the agreement mistake
instance
Taj
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the Taj
mahal
in India which is one Capitalize word
Mahal
among
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of
seven
wonders of the world , Correct article usage
the seven
it
attract millions of abroad public which generates tons of revenue Correct pronoun usage
apply
to
Change preposition
for
government
through entry tickets.Correct article usage
the government
In addition
to that , it create
employment opportunities Change the verb form
creates
to
residents Change preposition
for
as well as
business
. If the prices are higher for those spots which adversely Fix the agreement mistake
businesses
effect
the number of visitors Correct your spelling
affect
as a result
it will reduce overall
income
to authorities .Foreigners will not Add a missing verb
be interest
interest
Replace the word
interested
to show
up Change preposition
in showing
instead
they will choose other destination
.
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destinations
However
, government
should frame Add an article
the government
policy
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policies
either
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as either
same
price for all nations or free for Correct article usage
the same
few
Correct article usage
a few
countries
citizens .To Change noun form
country's
countries'
site
a good example , in Correct your spelling
cite
Nepal
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Nepal,
pushpanath
temple allows Indians free entry ,which makes more people Correct your spelling
Pushpa Nath
to
visit . Fix the infinitive
apply
Moreover
it Add a comma
Moreover,
make
more number , in Change the verb form
makes
return
it boots foreign flow of Add a comma
return,
income
to their country .
To sum up
, similar prices for national and international citizens, not only impress the tourist but also
bring foreign
flow of Add an article
the foreign
a foreign
income
by
Change preposition
through
airplane
tickets , visa Change the spelling
aeroplane
fee
Fix the agreement mistake
fees
as well as
shopping .Submitted by nikhilguni on
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Examples
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