IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 5

Some people think foreign tourists should be charged more than locals when they visit tourist attractions. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In the modern world , overseas travelling is most common .
Individual
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Individuals
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 visiting different countries for their holidays . Some people
believes
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believe
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 that overseas visitors should charged extra
compare
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compared
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 to
home
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their home
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 country fellow . I strongly disagree with
this
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 assertion and
this
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 essay will acknowledge the validity of
this
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 statement and elaborate my reason. Tourism is one of the crucial
source
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sources
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 of
income
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 in any country . Few
countries
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country's
countries'
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 economy totally relies on foreign visitors .For
instances
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,
Taj
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the Taj
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mahal
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Mahal
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 in India which is one
among
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of
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seven
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the seven
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 wonders of the world ,
it
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apply
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attract millions of abroad public which generates tons of revenue
to
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for
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government
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the government
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 through entry tickets.
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 to that , it
create
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 employment opportunities
to
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for
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 residents
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business
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businesses
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. If the prices are higher for those spots which adversely
effect
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affect
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 the number of visitors
as a result
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 it will reduce
overall
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income
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 to authorities .Foreigners will not
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be interest
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interest
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to show
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in showing
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 up
instead
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 they will choose other
destination
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destinations
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.
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,
government
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the government
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 should frame
policy
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policies
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either
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as either
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same
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the same
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 price for all nations or free for
few
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a few
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countries
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country's
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 citizens .To
site
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cite
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 a good example , in
Nepal
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Nepal,
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pushpanath
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Pushpa Nath
 temple allows Indians free entry ,which makes more people
to
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apply
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visit .
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Moreover
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 it
make
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 more number , in
return
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return,
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 it boots foreign flow of
income
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 to their country .
To sum up
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 , similar prices for national and international citizens, not only impress the tourist but
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 bring
foreign
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the foreign
a foreign
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 flow of
income
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by
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through
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airplane
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aeroplane
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 tickets , visa
fee
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fees
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as well as
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 shopping .

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Structure
Work on refining your essay structure for clearer introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. This will enhance readability and coherence.
Grammar
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Vocabulary
Try to use a wider range of vocabulary and sentence structures to effectively convey your ideas and illustrate your points more vividly.
Examples
You provided relevant examples to support your arguments, such as the Taj Mahal in India and the Pushpanath temple in Nepal, which strengthens your essay effectively.
Position
You clearly articulated your disagreement with the notion of charging foreign tourists more and maintained this position throughout the essay, demonstrating good task response.
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