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The plans below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year. summrise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The two plans captured the differences that will be made in an airport which is in the southwest of
a
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 country and the developments will occur next year. At first glance at the plan, the airport will contain more than double the gates that it has now. Another noticeable feature, more
coffee
 shops will be built, but they will remove the walkway areas.
Also
, interestingly, there will be a lot of new services
such
 as ATMs, sky trains, bag drops, shops, and car hire. Digging into the unchanged facilities, the check-in will remain stable, but its location will be almost in the middle,
while
 the
coffee
 shop will be moved from the down-lift corner to the lower corner, and a new one will be in the up-right corner,
Additionally
, there will be more gates.
Moreover
, there are a lot of new services.
For example
, they will add an ATM between the new
coffee
 and the car hire.
Also
instead
 of walkways, sky trains will replace them. On a final note, there will be a bag drop next to the check-in and the
coffee
 shop.
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Coherence
To further improve coherence, try to organize your paragraphs in a way that flows naturally from one point to the next. A clear introductory sentence for each paragraph can also help to signal the main idea to the reader.
Cohesion
Use a wider range of linking words and phrases to show relationships between ideas more clearly, enhancing cohesion.
Task Achievement
For task achievement, while you've done well to cover the key changes, make sure to directly compare the before and after plans where possible to highlight differences more explicitly.
Task Achievement
Your summary successfully identifies the main features and changes, showing a good understanding of the task.
Coherence
Your essay is structured in a logical manner, with each paragraph focusing on different aspects of the redevelopment.
Details
You've included specific examples to support your points, which makes your response more informative and detailed.

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