In many modern societies grandchildren rarely spend any quality time with their grandparents. What do you think are consequences of this?

Nowadays in
this
modern world
parents
prefer to move out of their
home
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after getting married. Because of that grandchildren have less
time
to spend with their
grandparents
. There are a myriad of results of it, especially negative effects.
Firstly
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for
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the reasons, why there is less
time
for kids to spend with their family members who are older, because
currently
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both
parents
are working far away from
grandparents
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grandparents'
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house, so they cannot get an opportunity to be with the elder people in their family. Another purpose of less
time
to spend with
grandparents
might be the parent's ego.
This
is life and it can occur anything,
such
as misunderstanding between
parents
and
parents
-in-law. Because of
this
kind of
misunderstandings
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usually
parents
move out to some different place, where there is no chance for kids to spend
time
with their
grandparents
. When it comes to the consequences of
this
trend, mainly and
firstly
, teenager are
loosing
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their valuable
time
which can be spent with
grandparents
. After
few
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years they will die out and at that
time
adolescence
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regret
to
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not
be
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with them.
For example
, when
i
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was
child
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a child
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, my granny used to live with us until her death date. I don't remember the
time
that
i
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worried about my
parents
,
due to
the fact my grandma was always with us and there
is
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no
time
to worry. She was good at culinary and always made us happy with her delicious dishes.
Grandparents
are the main source of history
or
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other things.
Also
,
time
with them
give
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the
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chance to learn about their culture and their family. Most important they learn to respect the older people in
community
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and how to behave with them. In conclusion,
currently
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parents
are busy and
inhabiting
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far from their family m which can be
main
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purpose
to spend
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less
time
with the elder members of
family
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the family
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. Because of
that
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that,
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they would lose
the the
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valuable
adolescence
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time
, family values and even family culture in the future.
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