In many modern societies grandchildren rarely spend any quality time with their grandparents. What do you think are consequences of this?
Nowadays in
this
modern world parents
prefer to move out of their home
after getting married. Because of that grandchildren have less Fix the agreement mistake
homes
time
to spend with their grandparents
. There are a myriad of results of it, especially negative effects.
Firstly
, to give an example for
the reasons, why there is less Change preposition
of
time
for kids to spend with their family members who are older, because currently
both Add a comma
currently,
parents
are working far away from grandparents
house, so they cannot get an opportunity to be with the elder people in their family. Another purpose of less Change noun form
grandparents'
grandparent's
time
to spend with grandparents
might be the parent's ego. This
is life and it can occur anything, such
as misunderstanding between parents
and parents
-in-law. Because of this
kind of misunderstandings
usually Fix the agreement mistake
misunderstanding
parents
move out to some different place, where there is no chance for kids to spend time
with their grandparents
.
When it comes to the consequences of this
trend, mainly and firstly
, teenager are loosing
their valuable Correct your spelling
losing
time
which can be spent with grandparents
. After few
years they will die out and at that Correct article usage
a few
time
adolescence would
regret Wrong verb form
will
to
not Change preposition
apply
be
with them. Wrong verb form
being
For example
, when i
was Change the capitalization
I
child
, my granny used to live with us until her death date. I don't remember the Correct article usage
a child
time
that i
worried about my Change the capitalization
I
parents
, due to
the fact my grandma was always with us and there is
no Wrong verb form
was
time
to worry. She was good at culinary and always made us happy with her delicious dishes. Grandparents
are the main source of history or
other things. Correct word choice
and
Also
, time
with them give
Correct subject-verb agreement
gives
the
chance to learn about their culture and their family. Most important they learn to respect the older people in Correct pronoun usage
them the
community
and how to behave with them.
In conclusion, Add an article
the community
currently
Add a comma
currently,
parents
are busy and inhabiting
far from their family m which can be Verb problem
living
main
purpose Change the article
the main
to spend
less Change preposition
for spending
time
with the elder members of family
. Because of Add an article
the family
a family
that
they would lose Add a comma
that,
the the
valuable Correct article usage
apply
adolescence
Replace the word
adolescent
time
, family values and even family culture in the future.Submitted by makemoneyizzy16 on
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