As the number of cars increases, more money has to be spent on road systems. Some people think the government should pay for this. Others, however, think that the user should cover the costs. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Number
of cars Change the article
The number
have
rapidly increased which led to spending more on Correct subject-verb agreement
has
road
system
. Fix the agreement mistake
systems
While
some believe that government
should fund these programs. Correct article usage
the government
While
others argue it should be the individual covering the coasts for road
operations. Even though the latter point has its advantage
, I believe Fix the agreement mistake
advantages
government
bodies should spend and care of the road
infrastructures.
On the one hand, government
can cumulate Add an article
the government
large
Change the article
a large
amount
of sum to spend Fix the agreement mistake
amounts
in
Change preposition
on
roads
and transport, this
can lead to higher quality in the roads
built and better infrastructure. one
of the biggest advantages if Capitalize word
One
government
is involved is that everyone no matter the class get the same quality of Add an article
the government
road
. In UAE, Add an article
the road
for instance
, the government
takes care of roads
, resulting in residents having the best road
experience.
On the other hand
, individuals cannot raise enough funds to have a
Correct the article-noun agreement
above average road facilities
an above average road facility
above average
Add a hyphen
above-average
road
facilities. This
can also
result in selected areas building better roads
compared to the areas that hosts
Change the verb form
host
lower income
families. Add a hyphen
lower-income
For example
, in Poland, few areas have better roads
compared to others because of the differences in class of people.
in conclusion, it is better if the government
takes care and spends money on roads
for better and equal experience for residents throughout the country. it can also
give all the places equal importance and help tourists to have a better experience through
the country.Change preposition
throughout
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