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The graph below shows the average daily sales of selected food items at the Brisk Café, by season. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average daily sales of selected food items at the Brisk Café, by season. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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Brisk Café's 5 different kinds of food
such
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 as hot
coffee
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, iced
coffee
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, ice cream, and soup and salad of their sales in
winter
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 and
summer
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.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 hot
coffee
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 is far higher than the other foods in
winter
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while
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 iced
coffee
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 is slightly higher than others in
summer
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. In
winter
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, around 75 customers
order
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 hot
coffee
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,
whereas
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 only around 2 customers drink iced
coffee
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. Other than
coffee
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, 50
people
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 choose soup in
winter
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,
while
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 approximately 25 customers buy ice cream.
In contrast
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, 40
people
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 choose to
order
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 iced
coffee
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 in
summer
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 and nearly 35
people
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order
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 ice cream. Compared to
winter
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, less than half of
people
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 choose hot
coffee
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 and soup in
summer
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. The figures for those who
order
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 salad are the same in
winter
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 and
summer
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, at around 25
people
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 each.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, winter, summer, order, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Average daily sales
  • Selected food items
  • Seasonal variation
  • Trends
  • Fluctuations
  • Comparison
  • Preferences
  • Anomalies
  • Promotions
  • Stock adjustment
  • Seasonal influence
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