It is observed that, currently, more and more people are working longer hours. What are the causes of this phenomenon? What effects does this have on society?

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It is observed that, currently, more and more people are working longer hours. What are the causes of this phenomenon? What effects does this have on society?

Fully explain your ideas

Some people say that subjects like arts, music, drama and creative writing are more beneficial to children and therefore they need more of these subjects to be included in the timetable. Do you agree or disagree?

Directors and managers of organizations are often older people. Some people say that it is better for younger people to be leaders. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

You missed an important meeting at work. Write a letter to your manager. In the letter: -apologize for not attending -explain why you did not attend -say what you will do to make up for it

You had some photos of your family taken by a professional photographer. Write a letter to the photographer. In your letter •say that you liked his/her photos of your family •ask him/her to be your photographer at a special family event •give him/her the details of the event.

In recent years, there has been a rise in the use of performance-enhancing drugs in sports. What are the consequences of doping for athletes? What measures should be taken to combat this issue?