The graph shows the number of tourists visting a particular Caribbean island in the year 2010 and 2017

The graph shows the number of tourists visting a particular Caribbean island in the year 2010 and 2017
The graph represents the number of
tourists
visting
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visiting
a particular
Caribbean
island
in the
year
2010 to 2017. I will explain
about
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this
chart in the following
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paragraphs
.
Overall
, the total number of
tourists
has increased from
1million
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1 million
in the
year
2010 to
3.5million
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3.5 million
in the
year
2017 respectively.
Firstly
, there are two types of
tourists
visting
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visiting
a
Caribbean
island
, they are
visting
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visiting
staying
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and staying
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on cruise ships and another one is
visting
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visiting
staying
on
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island
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the island
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.
Toursits
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Tourists
have started to visit
stayin
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staying
on
cruise
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a cruise
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ship
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from the
year
2010 ,0.3million have
began
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to
vist
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visit
the
Caribbean
island
staying from
ship
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the ship
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and it has slightly increased
year
by
year
. In the
year
2017 ,
toursit
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tourists
had
a
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intrest
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interest
to visit
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in visiting
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Caribbean
island
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islands
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by staying from
ship
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the ship
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and it
finally
rose to
2million
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2 million
toursits
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tourists
. Some
tourists
started to
vist
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visit
the
island
by staying on
island
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the island
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. In the
year
2010
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2010,
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it was
1.3million
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1.3 million
and there was no interest in
toursit
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tourist
tourists
to visit
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the
island
for three years 2013, 2014 2015
respectively
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. In the
year
2016, there was
decrease
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and it has
inceased
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increased
to
1.5milions of
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1.5 million
visitors in
the
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2017 compared to others. In
the
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total, there
is
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rapid growth from
the
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2010 to 2017
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from 1million
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1million
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1 million
visitors to 3.5
million
visitors.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tourists, caribbean, island, year, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.

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