You will have a speech about your country on the international college event. Write a letter to the event’s planners about the following: - Ask about the date of the event - What speech you prepared/why it should be interesting -What equipment you will need for your speech
Dear Mr/Mrs
I am writing
this
letter regarding to
my pidato on college Remove the preposition
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event
as I must prepare everything before deadline
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the deadline
Therefore
, I would like to ask you some queestions
about my session.
First of all, I want to make sure about the schedule. Could you inform Correct your spelling
questions
to
me about Change preposition
apply
schedule
sooner? As I may have another upcoming Correct article usage
the schedule
event
. Hence
I will focus on the international college event
first.
Secondly
, since you are the event
's organizer thus
in my opinion you should tell me about Correct article usage
the appropiate
appropiate
topic. So, I can prepare my speech as Correct your spelling
appropriate
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also
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and also
Besides
, you should tell me why this
topic is attractive for audience
so that I will find out the reason.
Eventually, before my Add an article
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session
it would be better if all of Add a comma
session,
equipment
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the equipment
are
prepared. Could you provide Wrong verb form
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projector
and pointer? Since I may do Correct article usage
a projector
presentation
in front of Fix the agreement mistake
presentations
audience
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an audience
the audience
In addition
to this
, I would prefer micro
mic Correct article usage
a micro
due to
simplicity
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the simplicity
for
my speech. Change preposition
of
Thus
, I do not need to hold mic
during the session. I would be thankful for your response as I can deliver my pidato.
Sincerely
YohanesCorrect article usage
the mic
Submitted by patricius.yohanes on
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Tone
Consider using formal salutations (e.g., 'Dear Event Planner') to enhance professionalism. Avoid overly casual language in formal letters.
Accuracy
Proofread your letter to correct typographical errors ('pidato', 'queestions') for clarity and professionalism.
Task Response
Clarify your role and the speech topic early in the letter to make your request more specific and grounded.
Structure
Use paragraphs effectively to separate different topics for better clarity and flow. Include a brief introduction and conclusion to enhance structure.
Task Achievement
You clearly articulated your needs (knowing the event schedule, speech topic advice, and equipment requirements), which is good for task achievement.
Tone
Your polite tone and expressions of gratitude are appropriate for a request letter, contributing positively to the overall impression.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite