You will have a speech about your country on the international college event. Write a letter to the event’s planners about the following: - Ask about the date of the event - What speech you prepared/why it should be interesting -What equipment you will need for your speech

Dear Mr/Mrs I am writing
this
letter regarding
to
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my pidato on college
event
as I must prepare everything before
deadline
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.
Therefore
, I would like to ask you some
queestions
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questions
about my session. First of all, I want to make sure about the schedule. Could you inform
to
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me about
schedule
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sooner? As I may have another upcoming
event
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Hence
I will focus on the international college
event
first.
Secondly
, since you are the
event
's organizer
thus
in my opinion you should tell me about
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appropiate
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appropriate
topic. So, I can prepare my speech as
good
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as possible
also
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do the research first about the topic.
Besides
, you should tell me why
this
topic is attractive for
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so that I will find out the reason. Eventually, before my
session
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it would be better if all of
equipment
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are
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prepared. Could you provide
projector
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a projector
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and pointer? Since I may do
presentation
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in front of
audience
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In addition
to
this
, I would prefer
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mic
due to
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for
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my speech.
Thus
, I do not need to hold
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during the session. I would be thankful for your response as I can deliver my pidato. Sincerely Yohanes
Submitted by patricius.yohanes on

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Tone
Consider using formal salutations (e.g., 'Dear Event Planner') to enhance professionalism. Avoid overly casual language in formal letters.
Accuracy
Proofread your letter to correct typographical errors ('pidato', 'queestions') for clarity and professionalism.
Task Response
Clarify your role and the speech topic early in the letter to make your request more specific and grounded.
Structure
Use paragraphs effectively to separate different topics for better clarity and flow. Include a brief introduction and conclusion to enhance structure.
Task Achievement
You clearly articulated your needs (knowing the event schedule, speech topic advice, and equipment requirements), which is good for task achievement.
Tone
Your polite tone and expressions of gratitude are appropriate for a request letter, contributing positively to the overall impression.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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