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The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

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The diagram displays the plan of
public
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the public
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 park when it was opened first in the year 1920 and today's plan. I will explain in the following paragraphs.
Overall
, the park which was planned
intially
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initially
 is far better than
old
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the old
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 one.It is properly planned to make
tourits
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tourists
tourist
 attract. To start, the old park plan
was looking
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looked
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lik
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like
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Task Achievement
Ensure to provide a complete analysis comparing the park in 1920 and today, highlighting significant changes or continuities.
Coherence & Cohesion
Organize your ideas clearly into paragraphs, each with a single main idea that is elaborated upon.
Task Achievement
Introduce specific examples or details to support your points, such as mentioning specific features that have changed or remained the same.
Task Achievement
The introduction sets up a clear topic for the essay.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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