It is not necessary for people to travel to other places to learn about the culture. We can learn as much as from books, films and the internet. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

nowadays, many people
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that it is not required to take a trip to learn about
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cultures around the world, and they can learn about other
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culture
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from the internet, books and films, in my
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I strongly disagree with
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the given statement, I firmly believe that learning about culture is
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subject to many, and it can not be experienced from books or movies, to cite an example, the travel
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to a new country alone
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Structure
Provide a more structured approach by clearly separating your introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. This will enhance readability and coherence.
Grammar
Be cautious with spelling and grammatical errors, such as 'many people thinks' should be 'many people think'. Addressing these will significantly improve clarity.
Content
Develop your argument with more detailed examples and explanations. For instance, expand on how travel provides unique cultural insights that cannot be replicated through books or films.
Opinion
You've confidently stated your opinion, which is great for making your stance clear from the beginning.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural immersion
  • authentic experiences
  • diverse perspectives
  • comprehensive
  • historical context
  • facilitates
  • sensory and emotional depth
  • holistic understanding
  • cultural bias
  • stereotypes
  • discernment
  • virtual reality
  • convenience of access
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