Topic: In many countries around the world rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing.

Nowadays, we can easily see that people who live in villages prefer to immigrate to cities, and the lack of population will

be appeared

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in

countryside

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the countryside

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in future. I strongly think that reduction of agriculture and disability for providing

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equipment for rural

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the most impact of

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idea

however

; they need to use modern technology the same as

citizen

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, too. All my reasons will be discussed in

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essay. “manufacture of farming production has been decreased to 100,000 per month in Australia”.

This

news has been published by on news agency that really warned the government. Whenever they

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out the reasons

of

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this

action, they completely recognized that the more rural moved to Melbourne, the more products they

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lose year by year. In fact, rural caused

that

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their economy

exposed

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to

demolish

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.

It is clear that

,

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handle

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and

prepare

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the best facilities is one the worst

function

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for each society, so if the villages become empty and

loses

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its

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population, the government cannot share all technology for people in cities.

Moreover

, most of the individuals lose their chance to use public transportation as well.

For instance

, in Tehran (Iran) more than 80 per cent of clerks suffer from

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Reverse migration.

On the other hand

, people have the same

right

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, so they need to use any objects with the highest efficiency and productivity. It is a good idea for any

countries

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country

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to make the best possibilities in villages the same as American policy these days.

To conclude

, I

am certainly believe

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that

although

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make

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new opportunities for rural to benefit

qualified

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from qualified

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possibilities, it will

be made

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cause

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some situations for any

regions

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region

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to get in trouble for some reasons

such

as

decreasing

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rate of economy and disability of government to manage the country.