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The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.

The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.
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Test3 book9 The diagrams illustrate some detail on the ages of the people of
Yemen
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 and Italy in 2000
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also
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and also
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 projections for 2050. The biggest
amount
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 of population in
Yemen
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 was the 15-year-old by almost 50%;
however
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, it is expected the higher range will be 15-59-years people in 2050. Italy's 15-59 years population was approximately 61 per
cent
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 and
this
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amount
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 will be the biggest one in 2050 too.
Yemen
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's community under 15 years old was half of the population in 2000
this
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 group was 61% in Italy after that 15-59years was the huge
amount
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 by 46% in
Yemen
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 and 61.6% in Italy and the latest one by almost 3.5 per
cent
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 the oldest community in
Yemen
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 and one fourth in Italy. It is expected
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that
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 15-59 years persons to be the biggest
amount
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 in both of
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this country
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these countries
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 in 2050
however
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, 0-14years will be 37 per
cent
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 in
Yemen
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 and 11.5 per
cent
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 in Italy the 60+ people will increase dramatically in 2050 in Italy
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 these persons will decrease by 5.7 in
Yemen
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 in
this
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 year.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words yemen, amount, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the first paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • age demographics
  • age structure
  • population distribution
  • youthful population
  • ageing population
  • life expectancy
  • birth rate
  • demographic shift
  • population projection
  • median age
  • dependents
  • working-age population
  • elderly dependents
  • geriatric
  • fertility rate
  • migration
  • demographic trends
  • baby boomers
  • demographic dividend
  • population pyramid
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