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The diagram below shows a neighborhood before and after construction. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main featuresl and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows a neighborhood before and after construction. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main featuresl and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram illustrates the changes before and following the building of
Benfield
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Neighbourhood
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. Before the construction, there were many trees, a
barn
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, and a
cornfield
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,
although
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 many homes
are
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were
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 built after it, and a new
road
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is
Wrong verb form
was
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 replaced by the fence. Before the construction, the
neighbourhood
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 was divided into three areas; the woods were on the left, the
cornfield
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 was on the right below, and the settlement area was on the right over the
cornfield
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. There was a
road
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 from the south to the north of the
Benfield
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 in the middle of the right and left.
Cornfield
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 and the settlement region
was
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were
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 separated by a fence. There was a
barn
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 and a farm in the place
that
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where
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 people lived. Throughout the construction of the
Benfield
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, a lot of trees were cut.
Moreover
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, the
barn
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 and the
cornfield
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 were replaced by new houses, meanwhile, a new
road
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is
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was
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 built between the old
cornfield
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 and the settlement area,
also
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 the fence
is
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was
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 removed. There are quite a few trees
is
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still in the park, though.
Park
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The park
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 is situated below in the left part of
Benfield
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Neighbourhood
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.
Overall
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, after building many homes in the
neighbourhood
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, there is still a park so that families can spend time with their family and friends.
In addition
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 to
this
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, a new
road
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 was constructed
in
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between the old
barn
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 and the field.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words benfield, neighbourhood, barn, cornfield, road with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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