Many museum and historical sites are mainly visited by tourists but not local people. Why is this the case ? What can be done to attract more local people ?

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Today, many
places
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, especially
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museum
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museums
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and historical
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, face a problem with visitors which
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more tourists rather than local
people
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.
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problem and
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towards that. There are many reasons why
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museum
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museums
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and historical
sites
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are more popular
to
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tourist
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tourists
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either from foreign
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countries
or
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cities
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that
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far away from the buildings.
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with, I guess that the most significant reason would be because of the advertising. Nowadays, the management of
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museum
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and historical
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tend
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to use
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online
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advertisements
.
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kind of advertisement will appear in every smartphone wherever it is as long as the smartphone is connected to the internet and it will attract more foreign
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to come.
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, the reason why the local
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do not like to visit the
sites
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is because the ticket to enter
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museums
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are
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expensive if we compare it to other recreational
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.
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,
people
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will choose to visit other
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than go to a place that
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to them but
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a high price. The management can do various things to solve
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problem.
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they should advertise the
museum
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and historical
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using local
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newspapers
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to attract many local
people
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there. They may use
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posters
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,
leaflet
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leaflets
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, or even
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billboard
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billboards
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to attract
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.
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, the management can make a promo
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ticket
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tickets
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, like a group promo or a family promo that
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the price, so
people
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will likely
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choose the historical
sites
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rather than going to any other recreational
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. In conclusion, the
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behind the rise of
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tourists
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visiting
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museum
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museums
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include online advertising and the price of the ticket, and
posibble
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possible
solutions are local advertising
as well as
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a discount on the tickets.
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