It is clear from the graph that the ratio of smoking men were the highest over the period given, while the women were the lowest in general.
The line graph
illustrate
the Change the verb form
illustrates
ratio
of men and women in
consuming tobacco and over the given period men were the most consumers.
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apply
Overall
, the ratio
of male
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males
were
decreased over the time Unnecessary verb
apply
perioed
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period
while
female
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the female
ratio
is
increased with some fluctuations.
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apply
To begin
, In 1960, 600 of 1000 people in men stood in the highest positon
and Correct your spelling
position
this
was
steadily decreased to just around 550 in 1970 and Unnecessary verb
apply
then
it falls
to nearly 450 in 1980 Wrong verb form
fell
then
after it Replace the word
than
reaches
the lowest number Wrong verb form
reached
therefore
approximately 250.
On the other hand
, during the beginning of the recorded period
females were in the least Add a comma
period,
positon
with just under 100 of 1000 people and it was almost doubled in just 5 years and it Correct your spelling
position
remains
Wrong verb form
remained
same
for Correct article usage
the same
next
five years, there is a notice of sudden increase 1975 with 300 and continued till 1980. Correct article usage
the next
Since
1980 to 2000 Change preposition
From
Correct article usage
the womens'
womens'
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women's
ratio
was
decreased to nearly 200 Unnecessary verb
apply
of
1000 people.Change preposition
out of
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