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The chart below shows the depth of snow (in cm) in a particular ski resort in Canada in three individuals years.

The chart below shows the depth of snow (in cm) in a particular ski resort in Canada in three individuals years.
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The bar chart illustrates the depth of
snow
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 which is measured in a particular Canadian ski resort in six months throughout three consecutive years. The unit in the Y-axis is shown in centimetres.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the
snow
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 in the second half of the record is thicker than the first half.
Moreover
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, the former, except April, and the latter have the same trend in their groups.
To begin
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 with, the
snow
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 depth in Feb and Mar represents nearly 440 and 450 in the first moment of record afterwards it drops to the same number which is 400. It still
fells
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 by 50 in period three to 350 together. Apr starts at 400 before rising to roughly 470 in the second
year
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,
besides
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, a dramatic decrease is seen in the
last
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year
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 to 300.
Additionally
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, November begins at 100
as well as
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 slightly fluctuating to just over 100 in the third
year
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. The thickness of
snow
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 in December and January registers approximately 140 and 150 in
year
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 one.
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, A noticeable swing is seen in the second and third
year
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 and both of them end at 150 and 180 respectively.

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