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Many people go through life doing work that they hate or have no talent for. Why does this happen? What are the consequences of this situation? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Several
people
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 are seen doing work that they dislike or
jobs
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 in which they are not skilled at,
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 is thought to have had a detrimental effect on the person's
life
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. The main reasons behind
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 are known to have been
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 the high social pressure and family burden
people
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 have to face.
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,
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 kind of
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 leads to high
stress
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 and takes a toll on the health of these
people
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. Social pressure by peers and the general public alike
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 is known to be an important factor, as to why the number of
people
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 doing
jobs
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 that they dislike or are not skilled at is on the rise.
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 social rules, where only
people
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 with high financial
jobs
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 are considered high-standard, these
people
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 tend to relocate to
jobs
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 that they are not interested in to try and fit into the norms of society and to be considered by their companions.
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, family burdens have had a huge impact on the lives of
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.
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 a rise in population, the number of members in each family is
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 on the rise, which forces the guardian of the house to work and earn more money to fulfil the needs of his or her relatives,
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, in turn, forces
people
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 to seek for
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 even if they are not trained at it or even if it is not
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 their liking.
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,
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,
this
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 has been
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 the pressure from the surroundings, it has a lot of consequences that come with it, many of which affect the health and
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life
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 of the person in the long term. Working in unfamiliar
jobs
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 and circumstances, not only creates a work overload for them but
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 causes
stress
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 both mentally and physically as they are forcing themselves to do these
jobs
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. Repeated
stress
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, affects the body and mind of
people
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 making them weak and more prone to diseases,
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, affecting their daily
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 routine and their future
jobs
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. If one works in a company
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 not based on their skill, it is shown that they tend to forget their skills, which in turn would make
people
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 lose the valuable skills they earned in
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,
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, making it difficult for them to shift to a different job in future. In conclusion, many
people
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 tend to do
jobs
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 that they are not interested in or
jobs
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 that they are not skilled at and
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, is mainly been
due to
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 the growing social and peer support.
This
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 situation, eventually leads to high
stress
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 in their lives, affecting their health and
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 making them forget their hard-earned skills.

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Try to provide more specific examples to support your points. For instance, mentioning a particular industry or job role could make the argument stronger.
coherence cohesion
Work on structuring your essay more clearly. Use topic sentences and linking words to improve the flow of your arguments.
task response
You have addressed the topic and provided reasons and consequences, which shows a clear understanding of the prompt.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has a logical structure, with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
coherence cohesion
You have used appropriate word choice and varied sentence structures, which shows good command of language.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • career guidance
  • financial pressures
  • societal expectations
  • familial pressures
  • personal passion
  • job opportunities
  • unfulfilling work
  • fear of change
  • stable employment
  • career satisfaction
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