Some people say that protecting the environment is the governments responsibility. others believe that every individuals responsibility for it. Discuss both views and give your opinion
Lots of
individuals
agree with
that the authorities in each country have to preserve the environment. Other experts believe that people manage to make Change preposition
apply
airs
and oxygen healthy.
On one hand, scholars discuss that the official institutions in every country must protect Fix the agreement mistake
air
environment
.Add an article
the environment
Organs
governments responsible for formula Fix the agreement mistake
Organ
law
and regulations so, Fix the agreement mistake
laws
there
have Correct pronoun usage
they
got
to issue the Verb problem
apply
requried
rules to protect plants , animals and humans. Correct your spelling
required
For instance
, if governments issues
required rules, not natural or considerable persons contrary Correct subject-verb agreement
issue
these
rules. For Change preposition
to these
this
, governments must protect the land
.
On the other hand
, others go beyond that the individuals
must protect the earth from pollution. People are living in this
universal, so when they exercised
their activities must take into consideration the methods that make the earth clean . Wrong verb form
exercise
For example
, individuals
and companies cause population and population today is the essential threat to the existence of universal. For this
, those mentioned are completely responsible for the security land
.
To Sum up
, although
the issues that
relating to Correct pronoun usage
apply
protect
Change the verb form
protecting
land
may be common
responsibility between Correct article usage
a common
governmental
and Replace the word
governments
individuals
but
l agree with Remove the conjunction
apply
opinion
that Add an article
the opinion
say
the official institutions in every country are responsible for Change the verb form
says
protect
Change the verb form
protecting
land
. Because they are able to make laws which are able to oblige people to follow it
and protect Correct pronoun usage
them
environment
.Add an article
the environment
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