Some people say that protecting the environment is the governments responsibility. others believe that every individuals responsibility for it. Discuss both views and give your opinion

Lots of
individuals
agree
with
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that the authorities in each country have to preserve the environment. Other experts believe that people manage to make
airs
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and oxygen healthy. On one hand, scholars discuss that the official institutions in every country must protect
environment
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.
Organs
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governments responsible for formula
law
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and regulations so,
there
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have
got
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to issue the
requried
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required
rules to protect plants , animals and humans.
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, if governments
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required rules, not natural or considerable persons contrary
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rules. For
this
, governments must protect the
land
.
On the other hand
, others go beyond that the
individuals
must protect the earth from pollution. People are living in
this
universal, so when they
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their activities must take into consideration the methods that make the earth clean .
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,
individuals
and companies cause population and population today is the essential threat to the existence of universal. For
this
, those mentioned are completely responsible for the security
land
.
To Sum up
,
although
the issues
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relating to
protect
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land
may be
common
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responsibility between
governmental
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and
individuals
but
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l agree with
opinion
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that
say
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the official institutions in every country are responsible for
protect
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land
. Because they are able to make laws which are able to oblige people to follow
it
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and protect
environment
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