The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countires living in cities from 1970 ro 2020, with predicitions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countires living in cities from 1970 ro 2020, with predicitions for 2030 and 2040. 

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph displays the percentage of the
population
who live in
cities
in four various countries between 1970 and 2020, with estimations for 2030 and 2040.
Firstly
, the percentage of the
population
has rapidly increased in Malaysia from 1970 to 2020 and its reached 70 per
cent
from 30 per
cent
but its growth ratio will decrease and the people
rate
who live in
cities
will reach 80 per
cent
. living metropolis
rate
in Indonesia rose to more than 50 per
cent
from nearly 14 ratios between 1970 and 2020, and by the end of 2040, the percentage of the
population
who live in
cities
will reach 60 rates.
Thus
, living in the capital ratio will drastically change by the end of 2040.
Secondly
, In 50 years, Filipinos who live in
cities
have increased to nearly 45 per
cent
from 32 per
cent
and after 20 years, nearly
half
of the
population
will live in
cities
. Nearly 20 per
cent
of the individuals lived in metropolis in 1970,
this
number increased to 30 ratio in 2020 and the
population
rate
who live in
cities
will rapidly increase between 2020 and 2040.
Thus
, These countries' growth
rate
is not faster but in 2040, nearly
half
of the society will live in metropoles. In conclusion, more than
half
of the people in Indonesia and Malaysia will be in
cities
in 2040 but in other countries, nearly
half
of the
population
will live in
cities
at the end
of 2040.
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