IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 7

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countires living in cities from 1970 ro 2020, with predicitions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countires living in cities from 1970 ro 2020, with predicitions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
#information #percentage #population #four #asian #countires #cities #ro #predicitions #features #comparisons
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The graph displays the percentage of the
population
Use synonyms
 who live in
cities
Use synonyms
 in four various countries between 1970 and 2020, with estimations for 2030 and 2040.
Firstly
Linking Words
, the percentage of the
population
Use synonyms
 has rapidly increased in Malaysia from 1970 to 2020 and its reached 70 per
cent
Use synonyms
 from 30 per
cent
Use synonyms
 but its growth ratio will decrease and the people
rate
Use synonyms
 who live in
cities
Use synonyms
 will reach 80 per
cent
Use synonyms
. living metropolis
rate
Use synonyms
 in Indonesia rose to more than 50 per
cent
Use synonyms
 from nearly 14 ratios between 1970 and 2020, and by the end of 2040, the percentage of the
population
Use synonyms
 who live in
cities
Use synonyms
 will reach 60 rates.
Thus
Linking Words
, living in the capital ratio will drastically change by the end of 2040.
Secondly
Linking Words
, In 50 years, Filipinos who live in
cities
Use synonyms
 have increased to nearly 45 per
cent
Use synonyms
 from 32 per
cent
Use synonyms
 and after 20 years, nearly
half
Use synonyms
 of the
population
Use synonyms
 will live in
cities
Use synonyms
. Nearly 20 per
cent
Use synonyms
 of the individuals lived in metropolis in 1970,
this
Linking Words
 number increased to 30 ratio in 2020 and the
population
Use synonyms
rate
Use synonyms
 who live in
cities
Use synonyms
 will rapidly increase between 2020 and 2040.
Thus
Linking Words
, These countries' growth
rate
Use synonyms
 is not faster but in 2040, nearly
half
Use synonyms
 of the society will live in metropoles. In conclusion, more than
half
Use synonyms
 of the people in Indonesia and Malaysia will be in
cities
Use synonyms
 in 2040 but in other countries, nearly
half
Use synonyms
 of the
population
Use synonyms
 will live in
cities
Use synonyms
at the end
Linking Words
 of 2040.
Submitted by atakantemizkan0 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
▼
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "thus".
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words population, cities, cent, rate, half with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 4 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 6 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "rapidly" was used 2 times.
▼
What to do next:
Look at other essays: