The bar charts below show precipitation in hot desert climate grasslands in 1980 and 2000.
The given charts compare the amount of monthly
precipitation
in hot desert climate grasslands in two different years, 1980 and 2000. The measurements used in the charts are in millimetres.
Overall
, the precipitation
fluctuated over the years for both periods given. Meanwhile, there was a huge decline in the average precipitation
in 2000 compared to it was
in 1980.
In general, the Unnecessary verb
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precipitation
level was above 150mm in the first period. In the first two months, the precipitation
level decreased. However
, it peaked in March and began to decline in the next
subsequent months. Correct word choice
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Then
, it reached the minimum turning point at just above 150 mm
in July before it started to increase gradually from August to December.
Meanwhile, the highest precipitation
in 2000 was only at 53 mm
which was approximately a third of the lowest in the previous period. It started at only 51 mm
in the first month and fell dramatically in the second month. Even though it reached the lowest level in March and April consecutively, it rose sharply in the following months and peaked in July and August at 53 mm
. Finally
, it decreased gradually for the rest of the year.Submitted by serlyayus on
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