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The table illustrates the predicted costing over the next 5 years in American dollars for three environmental projects for sustainable forestry. While the pie chart shows the projectured expenditure breakdown allocation for the only first year as the projects are set up.

The table illustrates the predicted costing over the next 5 years in American dollars for three environmental projects for sustainable forestry. While the pie chart shows the projectured expenditure breakdown allocation for the only first year as the projects are set up.
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The table shows portions of predicted costing in three countries and the pie chart demonstrates spending costs
among
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first
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year
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.
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, the
expenses
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 in West Africa and Central America were less in
next
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the next
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 5 years
while
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 in
South-east
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Southeast
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 Asia were much more. The pie chart shows a percentage of
projectured
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projected
 expenditure which has the largest amount head for salaries and the least for training and office
expenses
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. Turning into more details, predicted
costing
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 in West Africa started
with
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at
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 10.5
million
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 in
year
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 1 and
then
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 slowed down
in
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to
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 3.5
million
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 in
year
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 5. In Central America
also
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 the same picture with
decreasing
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a decrease
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of
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in
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expenses
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 from 20
million
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 (in
year
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 1) to 5
million
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 (in
year
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 5). As an exception in
South-east
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Southeast
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Asia
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Asia,
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 the
amount
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number
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 of
spendings
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spending
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were
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increased from 30
million
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 (in
year
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 1) to 50
million
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 in the
last
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year
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 5. In the next
illustration
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 it can be clearly seen that
a
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apply
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half of
planned
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the planned
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 expenditure goes to salaries (50%), set-up costs (30%), 10% for training and
other
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the other
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 10% for office
expenses
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words year, expenses, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Projected costing
  • Sustainable forestry
  • Environmental projects
  • Expenditure breakdown
  • Financial commitment
  • Allocation of funds
  • Biodiversity conservation
  • Carbon sequestration
  • Deforestation
  • Technological advancements
  • Policy changes
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