The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now.

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now.
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The picture beneath conveys the plan of one of the floors in a public library 20 years ago and today.
Overall
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, we can see, that the library developed in the technology field.
In addition
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, some of the old-fashion corners were destroyed. As we can see, the corner where people could watch CDs, videos, and computer games was replaced with a place where people
can
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hold storytelling events and there are two sofas at present.
Furthermore
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, children's
books
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which were near
this
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room
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replaced in the storytelling
room
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.
Instead
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of adult fiction
books
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which were opposite the storytelling
room
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, replaced with all reference
books
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, and adult
books
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is
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were
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replaced opposite the lecture
room
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.
Additionally
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, information desks and self-service machines are placed
instead
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of adult non-fiction
books
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. One corner
room
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, where you can read newspapers and magazines replaced with a computer
room
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.
Moreover
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, the enquiry desk near the entrance was replaced with a cafe. In the
center
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of the floor, there were tables and chairs 20 years ago,
however
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, nowadays, it is disappearing.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "instead".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Basic structure: Change the first paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words books, room with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the first paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • floor plan
  • layout
  • shelving
  • reading area
  • reference section
  • encyclopedias
  • dictionaries
  • circulation desk
  • transactions
  • digital media
  • computer stations
  • multimedia rooms
  • café area
  • social environment
  • leisure-friendly
  • expanded reading areas
  • user experience
  • comfortable seating
  • children's section
  • engage younger readers
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