Write about the following topic: Memorising facts is the most important way to succeed in education. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Learning by heart
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is thought by many as the most efficient method to get success in education.
Although
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memorising
facts
could help someone learn faster and may help them overcome exams in their career, I strongly disagree with
this
. Byhearting neither provides a deeper insight into a particular topic
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nor, does it help apply the
facts
learned in a
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situation. Many
people
prefer memorising
facts
as it makes the learning process
more
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quicker, helping them save time and
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a particular topic faster.
However
,
this
method does not provide a strong foundation for a particular concept to be learned. It only helps students understand a topic from a very superficial level, not providing them
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the
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more in-depth understanding of a subject. Only a real understanding of a subject would help
people
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with the aspects, helping them ace their exams, rather than just passing them.
For example
, it has been found that school students who byhearted topics were not able to answer exam questions when the style of asking the question changed.
This
is because they did not know how to analyse the question and come with up the answer as they could only answer what they had memorised. A different reason
people
prefer the process of memorisation is
becuase
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because
it helps them pass exams and progress
further
into the next stage of their education.
However
,
this
is only a temporary success. When put into a job or a real situation where they have to apply what they have learned, most
people
fail, showcasing the downside of
this
method. True situations do not happen as
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written in books, so these
people
tend to find it as an obstacle to
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the problem and
to apply
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the
facts
that they have learned.
Thus
, not giving them a
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successful time ahead. In conclusion,
although
memorisation does help in excelling
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life, it is not everlasting. The advantages of not byhearting helps someone get
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great heights in life and it is something that lasts throughout.
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