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In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building thay live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?

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Nowadays, individuals have become more interested in finding out about the
history
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 of the
buildings
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 they reside in, and there are numerous reasons behind
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 phenomenon. In
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 essay, I am going to
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elaborate
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 and the effective methods of how can
people
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 research
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?
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, many
people
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 have become eager to gain historical knowledge about the places and
buildings
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,
therefore
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this
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 passion would push them forward to explore these stories of the houses where they live.
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, In Egypt, in the ancient locations, many folks tend to research these secrets which are invaluable, and
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 of
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, they feel proud of their homes and neighbourhoods as
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 rich
history
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 and
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 great civilization means a lot,
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, when tourists come from all over the world,
people
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 can guide them and tell them interesting stories about these
buildings
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.
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, curiosity plays a crucial role in fostering
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's desire
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,
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, in the upper of Egypt, many
people
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 are digging under their homes to find the ancient treasures that they heard about from others.
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, individuals should take the right paths to research
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hsitory
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history
 of
buildings
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 they live in
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 as
history
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 books, documented reports, and
governments
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 guides. If they
are
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 going to learn about
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with
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 their own, they would not reach the point.
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, In Egypt,
government
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 made a wide range of posters and statues in ancient places to make
people
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 know about the
history
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 of these locations,
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,
residentes
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residents
 can access
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this
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 correct information easily,
furthermore
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,
schools
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 curriculums have the knowledge citizens may need to know. in conclusion,
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 it is an underestimated issue, it needs to be always taken into consideration that
people
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 are becoming interested in finding out about the
history
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 of the house or building
thay
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they
 live in.

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expanding ideas
Consider expanding on how individuals can research their home's history through modern technologies and the internet, as well as historical and community archives, to provide a more in-depth understanding.
grammar spelling
Pay attention to spelling and grammatical errors, as they can slightly distract from the overall clarity and professionalism of your essay. Examples include 'eleborate' which should be 'elaborate', and 'hsitory' which should be 'history'.
sentence structure vocabulary
Try to use a broader range of sentence structures and vocabulary to enrich your essay further. This can enhance the readability and make your arguments more compelling.
consistency
Ensure consistency in tense throughout your essay. Switching between past and present tense can sometimes cause confusion.
Introduction & Conclusion
You provided a solid introduction and conclusion that framed your essay well.
Use of Examples
Your use of examples, especially citing Egypt, effectively illustrates your points and engages the reader.
Logical Structure
The logical structure of your essay is clear, making it easy to follow your arguments and understand your perspective.

Your opinion

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • deeper connection
  • continuity with history
  • valuable
  • historically significant
  • preservation and conservation
  • cultural or architectural importance
  • curiosity
  • personal interest
  • public records and archives
  • previous ownerships
  • local historical societies
  • heritage organizations
  • anecdotes
  • official documents
  • architectural records
  • historian
  • architectural history
  • design and construction techniques
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