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Some students choose to study in another country for a time during high school or university. What do you think are the advantages and disadvantages of studying abroad?

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Some high school pupils or university students decide to go abroad to study. I do believe that the advantages of it
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 far more than the disadvantages. On the one hand, new experiences like studying in another country can be very beneficial for young
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 self- construction. As we know, by getting imposed to
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 culture and environment usually people experience lots of
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challenges
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 in students.
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 language or new traditions that the target country might have.
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Introduction
Your introduction briefly touches upon the topic but could be more comprehensive. Consider clearly stating the advantages and disadvantages you plan to discuss
Development
Develop your points more fully, especially the disadvantages of studying abroad, to provide a complete and balanced argument
Language
Try to use a wider range of vocabulary to express your ideas more precisely and enhance your argument
Structure
Work on structuring your essay with clear paragraphs, each one focused on a single main idea. This will greatly improve readability
Conclusion
Concluding your essay with a summary of your main points would strengthen your argument and give your essay a sense of closure
Positive Insight
You introduce an interesting perspective on the benefits of studying abroad, focusing on self-development and exposure to new challenges

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Exposure
  • Diverse cultures
  • Global awareness
  • Improves language skills
  • Enhances employment prospects
  • Develops independence
  • Self-reliance
  • Homesickness
  • Cultural shock
  • High costs
  • Tuition
  • Living expenses
  • Educational systems
  • Styles of teaching
  • Isolated
  • Disconnected
  • Reintegrating
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