The graph shows the proportion of four different material that were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country.
The line graph compares the recycling rate of
the
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paper
and cupboard
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cupboards
glass
containers
, aluminium cans, plastics
between 1982 and 2010.
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and plastics
Overall
, points of recycled paper
and cupboard
and glass
containers
were
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firstly
decreased slowly and then
the range of recovered paper
and cupboard
were
decreased slightly Unnecessary verb
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whereas
the number of recycled other items were
increased.
In 1982, the rate of recycled Unnecessary verb
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paper
and cupboard
was about the degree of 65 Fix the agreement mistake
cupboards
then
that point
was fluctuate
between 65 and 80 from 1982 to 1994. Until 2010 the degree of recovered Change the verb form
was fluctuated
was fluctuating
paper
and cupboard
was
dropped slightly to 70.
The Unnecessary verb
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point
of glass
containers
was 50 in 1982 and then
it went down slowly to 40 in 1990. The recycled glass
containers
were gone
up significantly to 60 in 2010.
The Wrong verb form
went
started
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starting
point
of recovered aluminum
cans was about 5 in 1986 and Change the spelling
aluminium
then
the range of recycled aluminium cans per cent was growth substantially to more than 40 in 2010.
The point
of the showtime of the rate of recovered plastics was less than 5 and the happened
time of that was 1990 and until 2010 the recycled plastic per cent was increased slightly to less than 10.Verb problem
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Vocabulary: Replace the words paper, cupboard, glass, containers, point with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slowly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.
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