Being a celebrity - such as a famous film star or sports personality - brings problems as well as benefits.

Being famous always has
pros
and
cons
and I will explore them by comparing
below
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. / these will be explored below. Looking first at the
pros
. Stars are often rich and can spend huge amounts of money without worrying. They
sometimes
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influential and usually admired, Moving to the
cons
. Famous people suffer from
lack
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of privacy because they are recognized in public. Their high profile restricts them from many activities which most
normal
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enjoy.
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, they become exhausted resulting in little free time and possible illness. Looking at the issues above, my view is that the
cons
outweigh the
pros
in my point of view, the
cons
outweigh the
pros
. My main reason for
this
decision is that especially the loss
privacy
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which I highly value, is not worth and advantages which come with being a celebrity.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Public scrutiny
  • Intrusive
  • Endorsements
  • Sponsorships
  • Financial security
  • High-profile collaborations
  • Social influence
  • Philanthropic efforts
  • Trust issues
  • Mental health challenges
  • Substance abuse
  • Pressures of celebrity
  • Expectations
  • Disconnect from reality
  • Normalcy
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